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I can't write your poem
I don't know what to say
So I try even harder
But the words don't obey

I can't figure it out
I really shant have tried
I could just write some nonsense
But I really can't have lied

I know how I feel
Though I can't help but say
Even if you left
I know I'd be okay

You are so close to me
Please know that to be true
Every word I've said
Every 'I love you too'

My opinions on the world
My views on life
These words would cut you
With a stone cold knife

As much as I care
As much as I fear
I can't let me love you
While I am still here

Maybe in the future
Another place, another time
When all is said and done
And my words don't all rhyme

So here I am, sitting
With you in my arms
But all that's in my head
Are these loud, ringing alarms

I'll never show you this
Somehow that'll give me peace
Knowing that this to you
Is my only living release

I'll let you go soon
Away from all of this
But for these last few seconds
Just one last kiss
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I tried writing a love poem.. turns out I'm not too good at happy.


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=Christianonfire7 May 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This piece has been featured in my journal.
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Mood: Joy ~happy-joy May 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow, thank you, that means so much! =)
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Mood: Love ~sakurachan456 Mar 18, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
it's really good i mean wow
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~happy-joy Mar 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
wow, thank you so much! That is so kind.
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~tursiops33 Mar 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I quite liked your poem, there are a lot of good ideas! Although I might recommend you to check your writing style, and the formation of sentences are sometimes weird.
Also some mistakes, like for example: I really shant have tried should have been I really shouldn't have tried.
Keep writing that's how you'll manage to get better! :D
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~happy-joy Mar 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It was intentional.
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~tursiops33 Mar 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh ok...
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